Film: 23/40 (Top level 2)
Your film is much improved from the first draft but still needs development in the transitions and sound to move to level 3.
Improvements made. Follows conventions, shows proficiency in technical skill.
Demonstrates basic technical skills and good understanding of conventions. Article needs to finish correctly - it seems to trail off. Should also be in paragraphs i.e. ident 2 spaces ecah new paragraph. Possibly add pull quote to break up text and add interest.